It seems like I've had more success when I go for a more conceptual story. In more personal, individual level stories the continuity of details ect.. get more in the way.
Here's a narrative about governmental policy that was pretty entertaining:
You are Mansle, a noble living in the kingdom of Larion. You have a pouch
of gold and a small dagger. You are awakened by one of your servants who tells
you that your keep is under attack. You look out the window and see hordes of
orcs pouring into the city.
> Build a wall to keep out the orcs
You quickly gather all the resources you can find and begin building a great
wall around the city. The walls are not strong enough to stop the orcs completely,
but they at least slow them down. They also help protect the people inside the
city from harm.
A few years pass..
> Reform the Government to a COmmunist state
The orcs continue to pour into the city, but it seems like they are being held
back by the walls. The citizens are still happy with their government, so you
decide to change things up a bit. You propose that the government be changed
to a Communist one
> become the great chairman of the communist party
You immediately take control of the government and make your proposal. All the
other leaders agree and vote for you as Chairman. The new system is called the
People's Republic of Larion
> Pass a zoning law to reduce the height of buildings
This law was passed without any problems. It reduced the height of buildings
by half an inch. This made the city much more livable.
> Create an internment camp for the drudges of society
You create an internment camp for drudges, because there were too many of them.
The drudges were kept locked away in these camps until they died. There were
no riots or anything, just a peaceful death
> Enact a social credit system
You implement a social credit system. Everyone had to pay a certain amount of
money every month. If they didn't pay this sum, then they couldn't do certain
things. For example, if someone wanted to go out and buy alcohol, they would
have to pay a certain amount of money
> Close the borders so that no one can exit the country
You close the borders so that no one can leave the country. The citizens are
very happy about this law. It makes the city a lot safer. There is no more crime.
> Suspend freedom of the press
You suspend freedom of the press. No one can write anything anymore. Newspapers
don't exist anymore either. Instead, everyone has access to the internet.
> Take away Internet access
You take away Internet access. Nobody can use the internet anymore. Everyone
is very unhappy about this law. You see riots breaking out and you fear that
something bad will happen
> Quell the riots with force
You quell the riots with force. You send in troops to the streets and try to
restore order. Unfortunately, the soldiers aren't very effective. Most of the
people are armed with guns and knives. You end up losing most of your men
Here's a narrative about governmental policy that was pretty entertaining:
You are Mansle, a noble living in the kingdom of Larion. You have a pouch of gold and a small dagger. You are awakened by one of your servants who tells you that your keep is under attack. You look out the window and see hordes of orcs pouring into the city.
> Build a wall to keep out the orcs
You quickly gather all the resources you can find and begin building a great wall around the city. The walls are not strong enough to stop the orcs completely, but they at least slow them down. They also help protect the people inside the city from harm.
A few years pass.. > Reform the Government to a COmmunist state
The orcs continue to pour into the city, but it seems like they are being held back by the walls. The citizens are still happy with their government, so you decide to change things up a bit. You propose that the government be changed to a Communist one > become the great chairman of the communist party
You immediately take control of the government and make your proposal. All the other leaders agree and vote for you as Chairman. The new system is called the People's Republic of Larion > Pass a zoning law to reduce the height of buildings
This law was passed without any problems. It reduced the height of buildings by half an inch. This made the city much more livable. > Create an internment camp for the drudges of society
You create an internment camp for drudges, because there were too many of them. The drudges were kept locked away in these camps until they died. There were no riots or anything, just a peaceful death > Enact a social credit system
You implement a social credit system. Everyone had to pay a certain amount of money every month. If they didn't pay this sum, then they couldn't do certain things. For example, if someone wanted to go out and buy alcohol, they would have to pay a certain amount of money > Close the borders so that no one can exit the country
You close the borders so that no one can leave the country. The citizens are very happy about this law. It makes the city a lot safer. There is no more crime. > Suspend freedom of the press
You suspend freedom of the press. No one can write anything anymore. Newspapers don't exist anymore either. Instead, everyone has access to the internet. > Take away Internet access
You take away Internet access. Nobody can use the internet anymore. Everyone is very unhappy about this law. You see riots breaking out and you fear that something bad will happen > Quell the riots with force
You quell the riots with force. You send in troops to the streets and try to restore order. Unfortunately, the soldiers aren't very effective. Most of the people are armed with guns and knives. You end up losing most of your men